I love to read, but as I become better at the craft of writing I find that I’m editing along the way. It’s annoying because I want to read for pleasure but certain words make me stop. How about you? It’s silly and a little OCD, (I admit it) but it happens.
Before I became an obsessive writer, I wouldn’t have noticed much of anything except the story and whether or not I liked it. Now, I find myself editing sentences and words when I don’t need to.
Things like: She had a smile on her face. Where else would the smile be?
An amount of $5.00 is due. You owe $5.00.
At this point in time. Now.
You get what I mean. I pick apart areas in writing that could be tighter. I especially find mistakes when I’m in my editing mode, when I’m in the throes of an edit. (Redundant)
Today, I’m stuck on something a little different but the same: the word START, or STARTED, or STARTING.
Read these sentences:
Meggie started laughing.
She started walking away.
He started brushing his teeth.
Levi put the car in Park and started worrying if he should get out of the car.
People were starting to swarm around the accident.
Chelsea started protesting that the fire wasn’t her fault.
I found myself starting to get anxious about the blind date.
Maybe we should–” she started to say, but I interrupted.
Was there anything wrong with the above sentences? Not really, but couldn’t the sentences be tighter? I think so. Here’s how:
She walked away.
He brushed his teeth.
Levi put the car in Park and worried if he should get out of the car.
People swarmed around the accident.
Chelsea protested that the fire wasn’t her fault.
I was anxious about the blind date.
Maybe we should–” she said, but I interrupted.
In each case, the word STARTED was deleted. Do the sentences in red mean the same as the sentences in blue?